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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
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is
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 moved by
the
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road transport, but it`s not the safest transport due to a lot of crashes and it`s
horrible
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 accident because a lorry has a weight near two dozens of tons. I agree with
this
 assertion because every person wants to have a feeling of safety during the ride. The
first
 reason why I agree is people don`t have a splendid memory, I know many people who
has
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 a driver`s license and don`t remember driving rules, who drive tracks
has
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 quite more responsibility on the road
unlike
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 a usual car`s owner.
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, if we imagine a crash with a passenger car or a truck, I think everybody would not have doubts
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cause
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victims
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the victims
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second
 reason is the period of
year
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the year
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 for passing a driving test
allow
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to
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 suspend from work
not
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 enough qualified workers. As for me,
it` s
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it's
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 should be obligatory
pass
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 the medical commission
also
 every year as in
this
 case all staff who have health problems would detect before it could lead to sad consequences.
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example
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, it`s back problems, obesity, pressure and heart issues. The other side of the coin is,
however
, that doing
this
 exam every year is wildly uncomfortable and not inexplicitly which way it would help improve safeness on the road because theory and real practical cases in every situation
very
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 different. To draw the conclusion, one can say that I more agree with
this
 point. I believe,
this
 measure would contribute
good
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 impact
in
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 driving culture and decrease
odds
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the odds
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 of
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an accident
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accident
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accidents
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