Television has diminished the free time of people. It can make people lazy and not socialize with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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Television has diminished the free time of people. It can make people lazy and not socialize with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Some people think that the environment may be destroyed because of tourism. Others, however, believe that it is a way to preserve nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. !

In some societies the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. What are the reasons for this trend? And what possible solutions could reduce this issue?

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. !