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Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol. What is your opinion?

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There are many
rules
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 against the use of hard
drugs
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such
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 as heroin and cocaine in many nations. From my own perspective, I believe that the same obligations applied to prohibition and selling of hard
drugs
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 should be applied to all
drugs
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 without the exception of tobacco and liquor and
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 notion.
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 with, ingestion of harmful
drugs
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 irrespective of their type can cause health problems to the body system. Excessive drinking of
alcohol
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 can lead to addiction while intake of tobacco can result in mental instability.
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, a study carried out in a private hospital in China revealed that 80% of the case of mental problems were a result of drinking
alcohol
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.
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, in order to reduce the rate at which
people
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 consume
alcohol
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, strict
rules
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 guiding hard
drugs
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 should be followed concerning the consumption of
alcohol
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.
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, when there is a law against
drugs
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,
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 will make
people
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 responsible. What
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 means is that more citizens will be highly concerned about their development rather than thinking of
alcohol
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.
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, in India,
people
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 are banned from drinking
alcohol
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 and smoking which in turn made the majority of the residents responsible.
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, it has
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 reduced crime rates. In conclusion, I equally believe
rules
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 guiding
people
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 to purchase and sell hard
drugs
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 should be applicable to other illegal
drugs
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 as well.
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 is because these
drugs
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 impose a danger to
people
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's health.
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, if there are strict
rules
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 guiding it, many individuals will be responsible and
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 in return decreases the rate at which
people
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 are involved in crimes. Moreso, some agencies should be employed for
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 special task. To be sincere, many things
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 broken in my house but the one, I'm going to talk about for the purpose of
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 examination, was our washing
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 that got spoilt.
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 fateful day, everybody was at home in the sitting rooms watching television, that was when we heard a loud thunder strike, we were all scared but to our surprise, it
didnot
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did not
didn't
 affect our Tv but the washing
machine
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 got spoilt because it was on, my mom was washing my dad's clothes. We felt blue because the
machine
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 has been helping in easing our stress. That same day, my dad told it to the Engineer's shop for repair because we cannot imagine our life without
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machine
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.

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Word Count

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Chronic diseases
  • Substance abuse
  • Psychological dependency
  • Social stigma
  • Preventive measures
  • Legislative framework
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Judicial system
  • Prohibition era
  • Civil liberties
  • Tax revenues
  • Harm reduction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Public health policy
  • Addiction treatment
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