The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.
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The charts illustrate the proportions of the different purposes of
water
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used in six countries in the world.
Overall
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, there are three parts to using drink industrial, agricultural, and domestic. The largest significant segment of using drinks in South America, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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was agriculture.
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utilizing
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for all countries the smallest rate was domestic.
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consumption for industrial only has high numbers of two countries which was North America and Europe at around 13% and 15% perfectively.
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the lowest industrial for utilizing
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was in Central Area at about 5%.
In contrast
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, Agriculture was a substantially higher proportion of consumption
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approximately 88% in Central
Asia
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. Central
Asia
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,
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and South East
Asia
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were the nation that have domestic
water
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the least and have the same figure at around 7%.
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Africa has 9% for domestic use of
water
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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