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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide the information regarding usage of
water
 for different
purposed
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 in six countries in the world
Overall
, it can be seen that the major
of
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of using
the
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water
by
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agriculture was
South
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in South
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America
,
Africa
, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
.
Whereas
, in Europe and North
America
 industries assist the most. Getting back to the details, it can be noticed that in Central
Asia
,
water
 used by
agriculture
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 sector was the most 88%. Followed by
Africa
84
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%, South East
Asia
81
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%, South
America
71
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%, North
America
39
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%, and Europe
32
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%.
In contrast
, domestic
water
 can be spotted minimum in all areas except
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19% in North
America
, 9% in
Africa
, and 7% in Central
Asia
. Probing
further
, industries are the main important for using
water
 in North
America
48
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% and in Europe
53
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%, and
minor
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 proportion of
water
 used for industrial can be seen
7
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% and 5% in
Africa
 and Central
Asia
 perfectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, africa, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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