Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?
Art
has already existed in human’s
culture for a long time, Change noun form
human
which
is meaningful in every Correct word choice
and
generations
. Some people think learning Change to a singular noun
generation
art
from school is helpful for teenagers which can affect the performance of other subjects. In my opinion, Add an article
the art
school
set Add an article
the school
a school
art
as a fixed course in children’s schedules have
some advantages and disadvantages.
Each Correct subject-verb agreement
has
of
Change preposition
apply
Correct article usage
the kids
kids
Fix the agreement mistake
kid
have
different personal characteristics, Change the verb form
has
not
all the children have high grade or performance after learning Correct word choice
and not
art
. Sometimes, children learning painting
or Change the verb form
to paint
making
some Wrong verb form
make
artworks
is Fix the agreement mistake
artwork
such
a difficult thing for them because not every child Correct quantifier usage
apply
have
a sense of talent Correct subject-verb agreement
has
of
Change preposition
for
art
. To be seriously
, teenagers may be tired Replace the adverb
serious
on
having Change preposition
of
art
lessons at school, then
those students
not only feeling
bored but Wrong verb form
feel
also
cannot obtain anything or assist interest develop
.
Add the particle
to develop
Although
art
is not a talented area for all of
Change preposition
apply
children
to try and explore, Add an article
the children
but
it is necessary for them to know Remove the conjunction
apply
basic
knowledge of the Add an article
the basic
art
. Art
such
as a visible experience to
people’s Change preposition
in
life
, which can improve the ability of imagination by Replace the word
lives
enjoy
with paintings or the sculptures and it Change the verb form
enjoying
also
give
Change the verb form
gives
students
some fundamental skills of
doing artwork. There are several functions of Change preposition
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
art
which make huge
influence Correct article usage
a huge
to
Change preposition
on
human’s
development. One of the main points of history Change noun form
human
can
be recorded is that people use Correct pronoun usage
that can
art
to record their life,
so that Remove the comma
apply
students
can realize more detail about Correct article usage
a variety
variety
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various
Change preposition
of culture’s
culture’s
history through those artworks.
To sum up, Fix the agreement mistake
cultures’
art
take
an important place in Change the verb form
takes
human’s
societies and cultures. Even though there were some drawbacks of force Change noun form
human
students
to learn art
, it still have
some benefits for teenagers Change the verb form
has
to
study Fix the infinitive
apply
in
Change preposition
apply
art
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