Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?
Art
has already existed in Use synonyms
human’s
culture for a long timeChange noun form
human
,
and is meaningful in every Remove the comma
apply
generations
. Some people think learning Change to a singular noun
generation
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art
from school is helpful for teenagers which can affect the performance of other subjects. In my opinion, Add an article
the art
school
set Add an article
the school
a school
art
as a fixed course in children’s schedules Use synonyms
have
some advantages and disadvantages.
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has
of
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apply
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the kids
kids
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kid
have
different personal characteristics, Change the verb form
has
not
all the children have high grade or performance after learning Correct word choice
and not
art
. Sometimes, children learning Use synonyms
painting
or Change the verb form
to paint
making
some Wrong verb form
make
artworks
is Fix the agreement mistake
artwork
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such
a difficult thing for them because not every child Correct quantifier usage
apply
have
a sense of talent Correct subject-verb agreement
has
of
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for
art
. To be serious, teenagers may be tired Use synonyms
on
having Change preposition
of
art
lessons at school, Use synonyms
then
those Linking Words
students
not only Use synonyms
feeling
bored but Wrong verb form
feel
also
cannot obtain anything or assist interest Linking Words
develop
.
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to develop
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art
is not a talented area for all Use synonyms
of
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apply
children
to try and explore, Add an article
the children
but
it is necessary for them to know Remove the conjunction
apply
basic
knowledge of the Add an article
the basic
art
. Use synonyms
Art
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such
as a visible experience Linking Words
to
people’s Change preposition
in
life
, which can improve the ability of imagination by Replace the word
lives
enjoy
with paintings or the sculptures and it Change the verb form
enjoying
also
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give
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gives
students
some fundamental skills Use synonyms
of
doing artwork. There are several functions of Change preposition
in
the
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apply
art
which make Use synonyms
huge
influence Correct article usage
a huge
to
human development. One of the main points of history Change preposition
on
can
be recorded is that people use Correct pronoun usage
that can
art
to record their lifeUse synonyms
,
so that Remove the comma
apply
students
can realize more detail about Use synonyms
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a variety
variety
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various
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of culture’s
culture’s
history through those artworks.
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cultures’
art
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take
an important place in Change the verb form
takes
human’s
societies and cultures. Even though there were some drawbacks of force Change noun form
human
students
to learn Use synonyms
art
, it still Use synonyms
have
some benefits for teenagers Change the verb form
has
to
study Fix the infinitive
apply
in
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apply
art
.Use synonyms
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