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The maps illustrate Felixstone between 1967 and 2001 before and after the renovation. Overall,
Felixstone
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Felixstowe
 was rather modern and had different facilities like a
hotel
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, shops and a fish market.
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, it has undergone significant changes
such
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 as a pier and
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farmland
removing
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 and
a
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 construction of some new objects. In 1967,
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 street to the north of the town was surrounded by several shops. There was the Gulf course and
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farmland on the sides of them. The marina with a pier was located to the south. To the
west
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 there were dunes and a
hotel
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 with a café near them.
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, a fish market was situated
next
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 to the marina. In 2001, the town was modernized:
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 farmland was replaced by a
hotel
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 with a tennis court and a swimming pool near it.
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, the fish market was demolished and substituted
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 a private beach and the marina with the pier was replaced by a public one. A car park was constructed near the
hotel
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 and wind turbines appeared
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 to the dunes.
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, some apartments were built
instead
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 of the shops to the east of
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 street.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer culture
  • Marketing strategies
  • E-commerce
  • Proliferation
  • Socializing
  • Self-expression
  • Identity formation
  • Materialism
  • Instant gratification
  • Trendy
  • Leisure activity
  • Frequent purchases
  • Accessible
  • Convenient
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