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Some people believe that there are various reasons that can motivate a person to keep working for the same company whereas others say that money is the main reason which gives motivation. Do you agree or disagree?

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Is
money
 the main reason which gives motivation to a person to continue working for the same company? Or there are other reasons
beside
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 the income which
causes
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cause
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people
 to stick to their jobs? There are different opinions and attitudes about
this
 issue. In
this
 essay, I will discuss them and give my opinion. Many
people
 believe that humans, work to earn
money
 for their needs and desires. The more
people
 earn, the more they are free to
fulfill
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 their wants and
money
 gives
people
freedom
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the freedom
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 to make their dreams come true. So
money
 is the main motive for choosing a
job
 and
continue
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working
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. On the opposite side, Many others agree that, in spite of the importance of income in
job
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the job
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,
money
 should not be the only criteria for our
choose
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.
Job
 is a crucial part of our lives and being pleased with work plays an important part in our life quality and even our life span. I believe that in choosing a
job
, a person must consider its harms and frustration,
besides
 its income and benefits. I am aware that it is not always possible for
people
 to choose a
job
 they love since unemployment is a serious problem in my country and worldwide and
people
 need
job
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jobs
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 and
money
.
However
, it is important for
people
 not to get involved in a
job
 that they hate or make them exhausted. A
job
that is
 harmful
for
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people
's mental and physical health, does not worth choosing even
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with
wih
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with
high
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a high
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 salary.
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