Although many people value their public parks, this place could be better used for other purpose such as residential areas for the ever-growing population or to develop business and boost economies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
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as hypertension, heart disease ,diabetes and etc.
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environment
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forest
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the forest
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stoped
and replaced by the trees.
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summarize
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