Some people believe that allowing children to male their own choices on everyday matters(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some
people
claim that granting Use synonyms
children
to make their own options in daily life Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
foods
, clothes and other activities Fix the agreement mistake
food
make
them Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
to
be selfish Change the verb form
apply
people
who only understand their own wishes. Use synonyms
However
, other Linking Words
people
assume that it is essential for Use synonyms
children
to make Use synonyms
decisions
about matters that can have Use synonyms
impacts
on them.
On one hand, Fix the agreement mistake
impact
children
can be unhealthy, stubborn, Use synonyms
over
confident and selfish if they are allowed to do everything with their own options. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, they eat whenever they are hungry even though the foods are not suitable Linking Words
with
their health and Change preposition
for
unbalanced
for their meals. Add a missing verb
are unbalanced
Moreover
, they believe that their choices are always right since they were young. Linking Words
Subsequently
, they cannot judge what is wrong and what is right because both their eyes and brains are covered with their thoughts. And Linking Words
then
, they do not accept any suggestions Linking Words
although
their parents and teachers Linking Words
advice
what to do. They only know about their choices Replace the word
advise
whether
they can affect Correct word choice
and whether
the
other Correct article usage
apply
people
or not.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, teaching Linking Words
children
to be independent plays an important role nowadays. Everybody Use synonyms
were
born lonely so Change the verb form
was
that
they need to stand on their feet in their lives. Some Correct word choice
apply
children
are taught to make Use synonyms
decisions
about every matter. Use synonyms
Consequently
, they are confident enough to face every Linking Words
problems
without fearless. Change to a singular noun
problem
Moreover
, not only their brains but Linking Words
also
their thoughts are intelligent and extended. When their parents leave them or passed away, they will never hesitate to make Linking Words
decisions
with their own thoughts.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
from
form
my point of view, being Correct your spelling
from
an
independent is smarter than Correct article usage
apply
the
other Correct article usage
apply
people
. And Use synonyms
then
, paying respect to our choices Linking Words
of
can make us confident. I am the one who is not controlled by my parents since I was young. So, allowing Change preposition
apply
children
to make Use synonyms
decisions
is an awesome way to teach them how to live alone.
Use synonyms
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