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Some people think that the government should strictly control the supply of fresh water, as it is a limited resource, while others it should not be regulated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 think that the
government
 should strictly
control
 the supply of fresh
water
, as it is a limited resource, while others should not be regulated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. The
government
 is tasked with the responsibility of providing fresh
water
 to most of the population and it controls the supply by building dams, canals and large
water
 storage tanks. It serves the main purpose of providing drinking
water
 for the
people
. The
water
 collected from rivers and lakes has dirt and contaminants and it needs to be purified. Without proper
control
, storage facility and good supply system put in place by the
government
, purification is impossible. The
government
also
 has to supply
water
 for industries and agricultural lands and it should
also
 generate electricity. Fresh
water
 is so precious and its supply dwindling, it becomes important that the
government
 gets hold of as much fresh
water
 as possible. Some
people
 may feel that the
government
 should not regulate sources of fresh
water
. Providing
people
 with fresh
water
 is definitely a good cause, but it can
also
 hurt the environment. Construction of the dams leads to the submerging of a large forest area. It displaces many villages,
cities
 and the habitat of wildlife. Since only a small percentage of the population benefits from
water
 projects,
people
 often doubt whether they are meant for the benefit of industries and big corporations.
Hence
, according to some
people
 just allowing
people
 to use the
water
 sources available to them is a better idea. In my opinion, the existing
control
 is required.
Cities
 do not always have
water
 sources.
Hence
, if the
government
 does not build dams and reservoirs,
cities
 cannot function. In rural areas, most
people
 depend on wells and ponds for
water
 and the
government
 does not
control
 them. Rivers and lakes do not belong to any person and the
government
 has all the rights to
control
 their
water
.
Otherwise
,
cities
, industries and farmers will be deprived of
water
.
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