In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

There is a trend in the fast-developing urban areas that the local shops and markets are replaced by the super malls and
super markets
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, thanks to the
costomers'
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customers
customer's
moving into the latter choices. Generally speaking, it's not
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positive progress on
this
issue.
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of all, it leads to
such
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inconvenient
and boring communities than before.
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, in the capital city of China, Beijing waved out the markets and the snap shops these years. From
then
on, the streets of the
contral
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central
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suffered vast depression. We have no place to hang out and touch the vibrant heart of the district.
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we could not buy
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vegetables
and fruits from the open-air food market, as well as the snap restaurants which were shut down. Basically,
this
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by the city designers who hold the idea of turning the cities to be more
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and clean ones.
However
,
this
movement could not lead to a
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lifestyle
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but has caused the decline of the population because so many local people could not afford the higher costs of their daily life. The flourish of the shopping mall is just the imagination.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumer behavior
  • shop locally
  • convenience
  • variety
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • community
  • personal touch
  • small businesses
  • local economy
  • big corporations
  • dependence
  • shopping habits
  • urbanization
  • globalization
  • competition
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