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Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. It should, therefore, be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money.  What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.

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there are many
banks
 throughout the world and
people
 want to repay their money through
loans
 or different forms of service, while many
people
 want to use bank's
services
, other parts of
people
 do not have trust
banks
,
this
 essay will check
this
 issue and I express my idea in continue. Nowadays, as we can see many
people
 tend to get
loans
 or credit cards for many reasons, and bank
services
 became very popular among
people
 in the whole world
also
people
 want to repay their debts with
loans
 and other
services
,
furthermore
,
people
 have known a wide range of
loans
 for different topics,
for example
,
banks
 provide different type of service like opening accounts or give
loans
 for buying a house or car and
this
 lead to
people
 can increase their life quality very easier than before but if they do not pay
loans
 in correct time
this
 will lead a lot of problems for them. There are many
people
 who are under the pressure from debts through different
banks
 and they can not repay their money,
in addition
,
people
 can borrow money really easy and can not to back easily and
this
 problem will lead to many suffer them,
for instance
, in my country,
people
 can get
loans
 very easily but there is a huge problem,
loans
 have a big profit and
people
 have a habit they want to provide their need with getting different
services
 and they will be distracted and maybe
this
 lead they committed to different crime for
this
 reason. In conclusion, I firmly believe that these
services
 can be good but
people
 should pay attention until they do not want to face the problem and when they decided to get
loans
 should caution more and more.
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