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Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e.g. television, the Internet). Do you agree or disagree?

#students #schools #universities #lessons #teachers #sources #e #g #television #internet
Education plays a vital role in our life. Even
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 are numerous methods to obtain knowledge , learners still
proritise
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prioritise
 their educators. I concur with the fact that gaining
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information
infomation
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information
 from the instructor is more useful. The live sessions with
tutor
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the tutor
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 will enhance the I.Q of a student as it
help
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 to clarify the doubts on time as well as provides
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information
 at once.
Initially
, the instructor will give in- hand
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sources
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 of learning
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 premises.
For instance
, during the
classes
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 a note is given to them
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apply
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written
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 on a daily basis.
Thus
, it aids in meeting
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 needs of it and
moreover
 distributes
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combined key
information
 of it. It is evident that
class-room
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classroom
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 learning will always be
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 a merit list.
Furthermore
, being a teacher
also
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apply
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acquire
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information
 on
day to day
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 life. An
inservice
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in-service
 education programme is held
on
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in
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 each
intitutes
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institutes
institute
 where they are allowed to uplift their skills by absorbing
latest
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 details.
Hence
, it is apparent that
offline
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 mode of studying will always be
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beneficial
benificial
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beneficial
. In a nutshell, there may be major materials present in
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 wide web and sets but abstracting from mentors will be definite.
Therefore
, learning lessons from teachers will always be a fair decision. It can be predicted that in the era of technological
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advancement
advancemet
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advances
also
 the demand for teachers will always be
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 rise as it
assist
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 in maintaining discipline and dispensing quality
information
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