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Genetic engineering will have a positive influence on society in the future.

Nowadays, the importance of
technology
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 in the field of genetics has been rapidly increasing.
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 some
people
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 claim that we should not rely on genetic engineering because it might cause health problems or environmental deterioration, I firmly believe that genetic engineering will positively change our lives for the following three reasons.
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, genetic engineering reduces the number of infected
people
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 by some viruses and is helpful for our health.
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, in the 1980s, some universities in France developed gene-edited mosquitos that cannot transfer viruses that cause dengue fever to
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.
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, the number of infected
people
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 per year continuously decreases. So, utilizing
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 scientific know-how will become essential in the future.
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, gene-modified foods help solve the lack of food. Genetically modified foods
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 as crops and livestock are durable against pests and diseases and can grow earlier than usual. So, we can easily and quickly generate
foods
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food
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 for
people
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 worldwide and solve the food shortage.
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,
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technology
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 helps save biodiversity, an essential element of a good environment. Using
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technology
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, endangered species
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 as polar bears can increase fertility and thrive more, and they maintain their number. And we can sustain the biodiversity in the world. For the reasons I mentioned above, there is no doubt that it is essential to use genetic
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 for a bright future. I firmly believe that the world will become more aware of the importance of genetic engineering and lead to a better lot.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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