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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays there is a prediction that the number of elderly people is likely to surpass the number of youngsters in the nearest future. Even if there are some benefits, in my opinion, a growing disparity between the oldest and the youngest will lead to harmful consequences. To start with, the old community is not able to
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 the country to a new level of standard of living due to the outdated attitudes of consciousness and out-of-date ways of developing the country.
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 the old group seem to be more experienced, they do not have
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 nation.
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, the economy will evolve slowly and the political course in the state will remain the same, which can lead to delay
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state development.
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, the significant adverse impact of the
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 population is that it will negatively impact the economy in the future.
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 force tends to decrease, thereby limiting its economic capacity to cover the needs of those who have already retired.
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 workforce going to increase as the increasing health care costs and pensions could be a huge burden on the budget. The most striking example can be Japan, having the fastest
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 population in the world which led to the stagnation of the economy in the
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 three decades.
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, the growing number of older population around the world can lead to profound social and economic consequences for a society, which makes it obviously a negative development.
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