In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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heating a debate over which genders can be better world

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. While history has shown that male

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often produce bad results, can a world

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by women become more tranquil? In my opinion, judging a person's

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ability based on their

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can lead to erroneous judgments and above all, these two factors are not necessarily compatible with each other.

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has no result in

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' decision-making but rather

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the goals and perspectives they aim for. In fact, people tend to follow a

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because they see their

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and power as good and fair, allowing the perception that these

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are doing the right thing. not because of their sexual orientation. We all hear about outstanding religious

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of different genders and they all bring benefits to the people like Queen Victoria, former US president Barack Obama, German chancellor Angela Merkel, etc.

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, a

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's talent in leading a community does not depend much on the

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they carried.

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, we often judge a

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's ability based on

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characteristics, but

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skills are the main determining factor. According to some theories, whether a person has the opportunity to be an excellent

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or not depends on

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charismatic

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, in order to be able to hold a position with important public responsibility, it does not matter whether a

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is male or female

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but relates to outstanding skills to lead society.

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, the statements about the relationship between

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capacity and the

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are unproven, making an assessment based on sexual orientation factors may lead to inaccurate speculation.

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, I believe that the people who can bring peace to the world will be the ones who stand out and not follow a negative standard.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

male-dominated leadership
empathetic
cooperative
inclusive society
governance
diversity
sustainable peace
social welfare
collaborative approach
international relations
leadership qualities
decision-making processes

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