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In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#leaders #society #conflicts #violence #world #women
There are
controversias
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controversies
controversial
 heating a debate over which genders can be better world
leaders
. While history has shown that male
leaders
 often produce bad results, can a world
led
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 by women become more tranquil? In my opinion, judging a person's
leadership
 ability based on their
gender
 can lead to erroneous judgments and above all, these two factors are not necessarily compatible with each other.
First
,
gender
 has no result in
leaders
' decision-making but rather
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 the goals and perspectives they aim for. In fact, people tend to follow a
leader
 because they see their
leadership
 and power as good and fair, allowing the perception that these
leaders
 are doing the right thing. not because of their sexual orientation. We all hear about outstanding religious
leaders
 of different genders and they all bring benefits to the people like Queen Victoria, former US president Barack Obama, German chancellor Angela Merkel, etc.
Therefore
, a
leader
's talent in leading a community does not depend much on the
gender
 they carried.
Besides
, we often judge a
leader
's ability based on
gender
 characteristics, but
leadership
 skills are the main determining factor. According to some theories, whether a person has the opportunity to be an excellent
leader
 or not depends on
the
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charismatic
leadership
.
Therefore
, in order to be able to hold a position with important public responsibility, it does not matter whether a
leader
 is male or female
,
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 but relates to outstanding skills to lead society.
Conclusion
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, the statements about the relationship between
leadership
 capacity and the
gender
 of
leaders
 are unproven, making an assessment based on sexual orientation factors may lead to inaccurate speculation.
Thus
, I believe that the people who can bring peace to the world will be the ones who stand out and not follow a negative standard.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • male-dominated leadership
  • empathetic
  • cooperative
  • inclusive society
  • governance
  • diversity
  • sustainable peace
  • social welfare
  • collaborative approach
  • international relations
  • leadership qualities
  • decision-making processes
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