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All children should be made to wear school uniform. to what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#children #school #uniform
the
school
 has fostered significant changes
to
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 our lives in recent years. yet, there remains disagreement about wearing
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uniform
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uniforms
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 as to wheater the rule has been giving positive or negative
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. while there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that the benefit of
this
 regulation far
outweigh
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 its drawback.
this
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first
 of all, it is an indisputable fact that the
school
 has influenced people's knowledge
by
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 facilities and rules. despite some teenagers
had
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 a bad attitude to follow the rule, especially
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in school
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uniform
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, but
in
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other children's
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they
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have felt greatly from
new
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 style
in
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 each level at
school
. almost of us as
gold
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 generation felt happy moment to use special
uniform
 from any level of education.
as a result
 of
this
, teenagers might be confident to learn and improve some skills in
school
.
on the other hand
, there is a low-budget condition
of
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 some children to join
school
's regulation, and it could be a challenge faced
by
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them. following
this
 case, governments have been supporting most of them to provide several facilities,
such
 as free
uniform
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uniforms
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 and
school
fee
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fees
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 in recent
year
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years
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.
however
, creating the same
uniform
 for each
school
 is to develop and encourage international education in order to have great social
live
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 either skills or
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economics
economices
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economics
. to sum up, children will have
better
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 situation and feeling to learning any subject in
school
 by
uniform
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the uniform
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. in the same position, great social
live
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 will come to their condition.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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