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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The given line chart illustrates the
amount
 of
coffee
 and tea buying and drinking habits in
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
, and
Hobart
. The units are measured in
percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
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 of city residents. The chart shows that there are about 44%
people
Change preposition
of people
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 in
Sydney
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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bought fresh
coffee
 in the
last
 4 weeks compared to the
amount
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number
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 of
people
 who reside in
Melbourne
 (42%),
Brisbane
 (32%),
Adelaide
 (34%), and
Hobart
 (39%).
In addition
, the percentage of
people
 in
Hobart
 who bought instant
coffee
 in the
last
 4 weeks reached 54% compared to the number of
people
 who live in
Sydney
 (45%),
Melbourne
 (47%),
Brisbane
 (52%), and
Adelaide
 (50%).
However
, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
 who live in
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
 who went to a café for
coffee
 or tea in the
last
 4 weeks have the same
amount
 of 64% compared to the percentage of city residents in
Sydney
 (62%),
Brisbane
 (55%), and
Adelaide
 (49%).
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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