Is it good for children to start using computers fron an early agee and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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from an early age has been the subject of debate in many
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. While there are disadvantages to
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of
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, I personally believe that the merit of using advanced gadgets
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far more. On the one hand, many commentators are of the view that there are advantages to using
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. From their point of view , by
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path adolescents can boost their
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self-esteem
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and self-confidence. Using computerised appliance
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, as e result you can feel
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of pride in yourself. It is
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maintained that
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you will be increased your knowledge by
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of hi-tech. At the moment,
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is going to computerisation, So you should
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your best not to fall behind.
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, Using state-of-the-art gadgets help you be up-to-date and have not any concern about
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world.
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, there are those who subscribe to the view that spending long-
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use of the latest devices has several
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had some health problems by spending long-term
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new devices.
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some aches and
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which are irrecoverable in our lives. When you look at the monitor
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and hours, it causes strain on your eyes or backache related
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on the chair for long hours. It is
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believed that, working extra
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some devices like as mobile phones, Ipads, laptops or
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just waste your beneficial
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, you are learning modern information, but you can spend a
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exercising or doing
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homework
homeworks
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. Having some mobility is necessary for
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that
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able-bodies. In my personal experience,
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being used by any age
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adulthood. One significant merit of
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advanced appliances is that you can work with them for daily tasks,
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foods
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. Another positive aspect of
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is that you are being gotten familiar with hi-tech that everyone use
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them more and more during their life and education systems. In conclusion,
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technology might have some disadvantages, I believe that
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are far more.
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