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Under British and Australian laws, a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant’s past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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 is to pass an
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maybe
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. There is a debate suggesting the previous
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 in the court while trial, unlike the current practice in the United Kingdom and Australia. I disagree with
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To begin
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person
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 a perception and is highly to impact the judgement
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 an image of a law-breaker in the minds of everyone in the court. A judge is less
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one who never has broken any law. I think that
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 the purpose of justice is to have equal rules for everyone irrespective of the image, People learn from mistakes and strive to improve
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, it has often been witnessed that after having a setback humans try to be better
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 and change for good.
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previously
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person
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 is not appropriate as
this
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