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SOUTHWEST AIRPORT IS BEING PLANNED TO UNDERGO MAJOR CHANGES FOR A BETTER PASSENGER EXPERIENCE DO YOU AGREE OR NOT?

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Introduction
THE DIAGRAM COMPARES THE EXISTING BLUEPRINT WITH THAT OF A PROPOSED PLAN FOR THE SOUTHWEST
AIRPORT
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 FOR THE COMING YEAR
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THE CHIEF EXECUTIVE ENGINEER HAS PLANNED TO BRING UP MAJOR CHANGES TO THE CURRENT ARRANGEMENT OF THE
AIRPORT
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 BY MAJOR REARRANGEMENTS AS WELL AS INTRODUCING NEW FACILITIES.
FIRSTLY
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,HE IS PLANNING TO REPLACE THE OLD WALKWAY WITH A NEW SKY TRAIN CIRCUIT FOR THE QUICK TRANSFER OF PASSENGERS ACROSS THE
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. ALONG WITH
THIS
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 ,HE IS PROPOSING TO INCREASE THE TOTAL OF
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 TO 18 BY ADDING 10 MORE TO THE EXISTING 8
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.NEW SHOPS ARE GOING TO BE INTRODUCED AFTER THE SECURITY CHECK FOR THE WAITING TRAVELLERS.
HOWEVER
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, THE SECURITY ,PASSPORT CONTROL AND CUSTOMS WILL REMAIN IN THE SAME LOCATION DUE TO SAFETY CONCERNS.
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NEXT
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 YEAR,THE CAFETERIA WHICH IS NOW CLOSER TO THE SECURITY WILL BE REPLACED BY THE CHECK-IN .THE CAFE WILL BE RELOCATED TOWARDS THE DEPARTURE
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 ALONG WITH THE INTRODUCTION OF NEW ONES IN THE ARRIVALS AS WELL.THERE WILL ADDITION OF AN ATM AS WELL AS A CAR HIRE SERVICE IN THE ARRIVALS. THE TOTAL NUMBER OF ENTRANCES AND EXITS WILL
ALSO
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 BE INCREASED TO 4 AGAINST THE EXISTING TWO .
Conclusion
OVERALL, THE PLAN PROPOSES A HUGE IMPROVEMENT OF THE SOUTHWEST
AIRPORT
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 FROM THE CURRENT SETUP BY MAKING THE
AIRPORT
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 BIGGER,BRINGING UP NEW SERVICES AND BETTER POSITIONING OF PRESENT FACILITIES.

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