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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 contemporary epoch,
parents
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 working for their
children
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's bright future is common.
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 has become a topic of debate, as some are in favour of working couples, while
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 think that
children
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 should get appropriate time with their
parents
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. It is analysed that working
parents
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 can provide
bright
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 future in respect of the funds the students require for higher studies, whereas lack of time spent can demoralize the young ones. Both
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 working have become the need of the hour, as there is a steady rise in inflation.
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, university education is becoming costlier, so it becomes paramount to cope with the dearness rate.
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, bachelor of technology cost was 1 lakh rupee in 2010, whereas it surpassed 2 lakh in 2022. So it becomes valuable for
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 to work
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the
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shifts for the bright forthcoming of their
children
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. Whereas, the most hours spent without their
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 can lower the
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morale
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moral
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 of
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adolescents.
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Because
,
teenager
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the teenager
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 is the most important duration of any human, as it is making or breaking period.
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,
parents
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 should be close to their
children
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, as they have many ambitions and problems which can be only shared with people, with whom younger one thinks, they are comfortable
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.
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,
parents
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 should spend some valuable
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, especially in the teenage phase of their child, as it would be helpful in
support
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the support
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 they require. To summarize, it has become important to work for the wealth required for their
children
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's bright forthcoming, but on the other ,hand giving the proper support and time to their young ones is
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, it should be a balance between both, as earning money will bring no outcome, if the child is not ready to continue his or her higher study.
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