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More and more parents are allowing their kids to play on computers and tablets because they believe it will help their kids develop their technological literacy. To what extent do you agree?

More and more parents are allowing their
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 to play on computers and tablets because they believe it will help their
kids
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 develop their technological literacy.
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 do need to keep up with the trends, but there are more drawbacks, in my opinion. The amount of time some
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 spend on computers and tablets has drawbacks. Continually staring at an electric screen might cause short-sightedness.
Children
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 who are forced to remain
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position for an extended period of time may develop lumbar or spinal issues.
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's
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 after midnight will undoubtedly have a negative impact on their ability to sleep.
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 being exposed to dishonest online marketing is another issue. Unreliable businesses may con
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 out of substantial quantities of money. The money is
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 lost forever. A family will suffer a great loss
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.
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,
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 may lose interest in their studies if they spend too much time playing video games online. They can't hear what the lecturers are saying since their brains are occupied with games during class. To sum up, playing video games on computers and tablets has certain negative consequences on
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 parents need to pay closer attention. Minors cannot be treated
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 adults since they lack the capacity for strong will.

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