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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is known that all
people
always
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 afraid of making big or even small changes in their lives.
This
 can cause psychological and social problems. There are some examples of them and solutions that can be helpful.
Firstly
, resisting
of
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changes in
people
's lives can make them stressed or depressed. To avoid these they should communicate with
people
, who can help them.
For example
, visit a psychologist and do all things he
suggest
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, like reading useful books or
watch
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 inspirational movies.
This
 will lead
people
 to start a new life and help to understand what exactly you expect from your life.
Secondly
, for those, who hold out varieties, life becomes ordinary. They start to get tired
from
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 living. The best way to avoid
this
 problem is to learn new things.
For instance
, travelling much, start to read motivational books,
meet
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 active and enthusiastic
people
.
As a result
,
person
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 himself will move on and try to be fulfilled.
Lastly
, those kinds of
people
 interrupt others around them
of
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 becoming happier. The solution is to stop being pessimistic.
In other words
, to calm down, think of the
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world
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word
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 beauty or give a hand to the one, who is
next
 to you, in making their dreams
came
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 true. By doing
these
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people
 will be cheered up and motivated to reach new heights. In my opinion,
people
 should not resist because of being afraid.
World
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The world
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 is changing from day to day and if
person
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a person
the person
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 stays the same, he will be rejected by society.
People
 should try to move on and risk.
That is
 what every successful person does.
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