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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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individuals
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select
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insist
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work
 for corporations. In fact,
people
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work
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 business might gain more incoming and have more
benefit
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.
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, it is likely due to
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 of
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 of unemployment would be increased. In
this
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what
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 the disadvantage of
this
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 and why
this
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 is due to mention.
Firstly
, self-employed is the one way which
people
 could earn more money without
be
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 as employed in the company.
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people
gain
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 more incoming
and
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benefits. Remarkably, they would attain more money, if they worked more hours.
For instance
, a person who has a store can
might
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increase incoming if he started early morning and could increase his sale.
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years
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 plenty of
people
 who
work
 as self-employed have undoubtedly lost their job because of COVID 19. In
this
 case, little business has been damaged by COVID 19 more than huge companies.
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, persons who
work
 in companies
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 been damaged in compare self-employed ones they were able to tolerate
this
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that
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those one
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, numerous
people
 who had street food
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,
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 lost their job
in
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this
 period and
they
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had to change theirs. While
,
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 the percentage of
people
 who
work
 in
company
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the company
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 was damaged
were
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more
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less than self-employed one. In conclusion, in descending market the person who
have
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 no constant salary might be vulnerable more than employed
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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