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It is no longer necessary that animals should be slaughtered and made into either human foodstuffs or non-foodstuffs, such as fur and medicine. Do you agree or disagree?

#animals #foodstuffs #non-foodstuffs #fur #medicine
Some people argue that it is okay to
use
animals
 for human benefits. While
other
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others
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 believe that exploiting these creatures is not acceptable.
Personally
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,Personally
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 I strongly believe that
use
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the use
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 of
animals
 for human
purpose
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purposes
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 is completely wrong. Exploiting
animals
 for human
purpose
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purposes
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 is problematic in
following
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the following
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 ways:-
Firstly
 some scientific
experiments
to
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using
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use
 animal is completely inhumane. Scientists
use
animals
 as their basic tools for their
experiments
.
Animals
 are subjected to tests that are painful or cause permanent death and
that is
 morally wrong no
matters
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matter
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 how much
human
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humans
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 are getting benefit from them.
Animals
 do not willingly sacrifice themselves for the advancement of human welfare and new technology. When
the
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apply
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human decide the fate of
animals
 in the research environment the
animals
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animal's
animals'
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right
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rights
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 are taken away from them without
the
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a
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second
 thought
of
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about
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 their quality lives and
well being
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well-being
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.
Secondly
 each year many poachers illegally kill these
animals
. Some business owners hire these poachers to kill these
animals
 for the sake of
experiments
 or selling their body parts.
Last
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The last
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 reason is killing
animals
on
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for
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 the purpose will
further
detriotate
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deteriorate
 our ecosystem without realizing their consequences in the future. I would agree that it is necessary to
use
animals
 when it comes
for
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to
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 conducting new research about medicine
for
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to
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improvements
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improve
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 of human health.
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Nonetheless
Nonethless
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Nonetheless
 a closer examination shows that some volunteers are happy to experience
experiments
 on them and
government
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the government
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are
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is
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also
 paying for
this
.
This
 makes sense that
alternative
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an alternative
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 method is used to replace utilizing
animals
. In conclusion, it
manifest
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manifests
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 that killing
animals
 is not acceptable and alternative
method
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methods
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 can be
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identified
indentified
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identified
.
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