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These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for children. Discuss both views and give your own pinion

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Migrating for work has always been a part of civilisation, even more so in our day and age. Most parents move with their young ones thereby sparking the debate of whether
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 highlight the negatives with appropriate examples, even though I am of the belief that the pros outweigh the cons.
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 and foremost, family comes
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. So moving with the family when one gets work in another country ensures that the family unit remains intact. The children benefit immensely when they are under the care of their biological parents.
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 is shown by the higher statistics of juvenile delinquency in Zimbabwean teenagers whose parents are abroad than those who are with them.
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, the relocation affords them a larger pool of opportunities in life. Especially, if they are coming from less developed communities.
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, the whole process can be culturally taxing for them.
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 will in effect have an impact on how they blend in and adjust to the new environment. The other challenge is that of being cut off from the extended family. Those who have strong bonds with grandparents, aunts and other relatives will be negatively impacted but with the introduction of social media ,platforms
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 problem can be minimised as they can communicate via forms
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 as video calling. After looking at both arguments, that of the pros and cons of youngsters being relocated to other countries as their guardians move, I believe to a large extent that they are better off being with them than being left behind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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