In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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am agree
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about
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that
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fast foods make
negative
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impact
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body
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, fast
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so
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yummy when
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but do not
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healthy
healty
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healthy
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in my opinion traditional
fusion
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it has better than fast
food
. Because Indonesia fusion
have
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a
lot
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ingredients like ginger. Many
store
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fast
food
in
indonesian
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which is available
easier
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and easier
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to consume.
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Indonesia
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in Indonesia
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like
fried
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a fried
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chicken
restaurant
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restaurants
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • nutritional value
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • family mealtime traditions
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • culinary skills
  • homogenization
  • globalization
  • convenient
  • accessible meals
  • traditional cuisine
  • fast-paced lifestyle
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