In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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cultural heritage
nutritional value
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diabetes
heart diseases
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carbon footprint
culinary skills
homogenization
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convenient
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traditional cuisine
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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on individualism, with people prioritizing their personal goals and desires over collective interests. Is this is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe the purpose of education is to make people useful to society. Others believe it is to prepare them to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same job. What problem this causes? What are solution?