Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by verysmall numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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field including the rising use of social media are happening
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every corner of the world. Social media enable us to connect to other
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even though
they are located far away from us,
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made us prone to cultural and
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exposure around the world. When more
languages
are spoken internationally, we often find traditional
languages
in our country on the brink of extinction because they are not spoken by the younger generations
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daily. I have to agree that the governments should spend public money on saving these traditional
languages
.
Languages
are not only a way to communicate but
also
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how our ancestors built
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civilization. Nowadays,
languages
are getting simpler compared to complex symbols used in the past to speak and write. The downside of globalisation is the
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possibility
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the younger generations in the future might not know the
languages
spoken by their ancestors.
This
might be caused by the lack of education or lessons taught in schools regarding traditional
languages
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it
also
means that these days it is harder to find teachers who are competent to teach these
languages
at school. With that being said, I think the government should pay more attention to the traditional
language
classes taught in schools and make
language
courses
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accessible to the public.
This
way public will be more aware of the importance of traditional
languages
and the channels available to preserve them.
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little preparation and lack of strategic planning on methods to preserve traditional
languages
could cause a negative impact on the overall budget
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language
preservation. Some
people
might think that preserving traditional
languages
is a waste of money because
instead
of that, why not the government pay more attention to renovating public places and making public transportation more accessible for the public. The preservation of traditional
languages
if not done correctly with careful steps, will have
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benefits for the public as the budget could go
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waste. When
language
courses and classes in schools are not organized properly,
people
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existence
of traditional
languages
in the middle of modernity. In conclusion, I personally think that the preservation of traditional
languages
spoken by our ancestors should be done by the government with proper budgeting and strategic planning.
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must be done to avoid spending public money in careless ways and
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existence
of our traditional cultures and
languages
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