The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge, but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In the recent era, there is a hot debate on
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of schooling. A group of people argues that
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society. I personally agree with
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issue and I strongly support my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, technology and industry are increasingly altering and job security has been
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In other words
, contemporary occupations and professions entail modern skills that receive through
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and information. In
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subjects
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as finance and accounting.
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sake of lack of enough skills in new work-related systems.
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job is vulnerable now. After all, the role of flexibility in
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are faced with
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in various situations that are unforeseen. Thereby, instilling traditional and stable theories in universities
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them to solve issues that are new- established.
Therefore
higher
education
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Tehran University is
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educational system.
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. In conclusion, I believe new
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concerning
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unanticipated states.
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