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Some people think that it is the duty of citizen keep their living place clean and tidy. Other people believe that government should take the responsibility to make the area clean. Discuss both, give your own opinion.

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The table illustrates the three different types of publications including
books
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,
novels
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 and
magazines
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 in one of the local bookshops in the UK for January 2010. The figures are divided into two groups which are sales to non-members and members. The general overview is that the total number of publications sold in January 2010 was 3134, Of
this
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 figure, 144 items were
books
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 and 1291 were
novels
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.
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,
magazines
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 accounted for the greatest number of sales at 1699. According to the figures of the non-members, comprised of students, adults and seniors, Students bought 330
magazines
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, 44
books
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 and 31
novels
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.
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, adults bought 1250
magazines
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, 30
books
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 and 194
novels
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. It can be seen that more
magazines
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 were sold to adults than to any other
groups
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 of customers.
Although
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 no book was sold to seniors, they purchased 124
novels
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 and 80
magazines
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. About Bookshop members, they bought more
books
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 and
novels
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 than other customers, accounting for 70 and 942, respectively.
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, 39
magazines
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 were sold to members, which
were
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 fewer than other types of customers.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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