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The best curriculum is not one based on static body of knowledge, but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#curriculum #body #students #change
There is a hot debate on what factors about be considered
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educational
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. A group opines that the best curriculum should be
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body
 of knowledge, while other believe that it can be
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body
. In the recent era, it seems a hot debate
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 is
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 issue. I completely agree with
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that is
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body
 of knowledge, and in
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 I will discuss why
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To begin
 with, the best curriculum should allocate all of
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students
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. The
students
 have creator minds. we should be able to use all their talents and skills with a proper plan.
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, many schools in developing countries are still focusing on those literary works which were written by people who lived in the ancient world
otherwise
, we should teach
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more practical lessons and life and psychological skills in the curriculum. The research has proven in our
country
students
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technical
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 are much easier to work after graduation because their curricula have been more practical.
On the other hand
, just knowing will not help us if we can’t use it in a practical way. In fact,
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body
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is not suitable for the young generation who want to be productive for a
country
. Nowadays must be competent enough to deal with computer
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, multitask research, and communicative issues due to
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Therefore
, updated courses and operations that are needed for
students
' future should be evaluated
first
 and
then
 included in their programs. In conclusion, I believe curricula in each
country
 are based on the needs and policies of that
country
 and must be considered in its dynamic aspect. Teaching courses should be limited to purely theoretical and only to the extent that it gives
students
 sufficient insight.
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