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Young people are much more aware of and concerned abour issues like environment, poverty and animal welfares than prerious generations. What is your opinion?

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Environment, poverty and animal welfares are the most trending issue of the decade. Due to media
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 these topics are highlighted, so more steps are been taken.
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, youth is more active
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 these issues rather than their ancestors. The essay will discuss the reason
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awareness
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for
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 youth into
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 problems that the country is facing and why earlier
generations
 were not so actively participating.
This
 is the generation of digital media, where news and issues are actively spread throughout the world in no time.
Therefore
,
this
 is the main reason behind the consciousness and active participation of the young brat in
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 problems.
Moreover
,
this
 age group people are bold, can take
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 and are
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 in front of governance and media house.
For instance
, the Kyoto protocol is a framework set up by the UN for
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 sustainable environment, which set limits on
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 emission of carbon, and
young
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 brigade is actively supporting these types of many policies and programs running around the world. The active participation is due to the known facts about the exploitation of resources in the past, and if no one stands today, there will be nothing for future
generations
.
On the other hand
, earlier
generations
 were more self-centred towards their families, which might be the need of the hour.
Also
, there was less awareness about the negative impacts of
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. In general, the most concerned topic was abuse against animals, as bulls were used for farming
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 because there was no machinery at that time. Even horses were used as
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 of transport, which today is used for status. Even there was large-scale deforestation, for increment in agriculture and urban areas. To summarise, the current generation is more active and sensible towards
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global problems rather than previous
generations
 as they were more about surviving than preserving. In my opinion, the young brat is more sensible and active in a sustainable future.
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