People who read for pleasure in their free time have a better imagination than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write your response not less than 250 words.

Some people think that they can develop their visualising skills by reading in a constraint-free environment; whereas others perceive watching a
TV
to be a better medium for polishing their abilities. Despite
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TV
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entertainment, in my
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I strongly recommend that seeing through the
books
relaxedly can enhance
one
's own imagination
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to a great extent. On the
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hand,
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I agree that reading freely is a way to gain
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mastery.
Firstly
, it increases the time span of an eye over the words. So,
one
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multiple times. Eventually, a dictionary is referred
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to find out the exact meanings thereby leading to
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an
afficionado
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aficionado
aficionados
in the language
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understanding
undertsanding
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understanding
.
Secondly
, those who
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reading material
pleasurely
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pleasantly
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gain
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overall increased patience level in their day-to-day activities.
For instance
, children who follow a habit of
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stories are witnessed to be
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and
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thinker
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in their approach.
On the other hand
, watching
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television in free time for longer can prove to be daunting.
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issue is,
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shelf life of any information we see on
TV
is of perishable nature as it lasts for
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seconds only as compared to that of
books
. Though
,
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it can be entertaining most of the
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, it actually makes
one
sit for hours in front of the
TV
making him the couch potato.
Hence
, that leaves behind
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very little room for the person to think creatively. Another challenge of watching
TV
is that it brings
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the
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lethargy
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the body and
therefore
the human brain stop working. In conclusion, the debate will continue between two groups who support reading
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books
and watching
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TV
as a free time activity. In my
opinion
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seeing through the
books
is in
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a better
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position to develop
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dreaming skills than watching television.
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