Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have a risk. Do you think that advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Since social
media
have grown, the issue of the security of personal data is ambiguous. In spite of
this
fact, social
media
is the most popular
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the pros and cons of social networks will be discussed. On the one hand, the safety of using
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is questionable. Nowadays kids, who are allowed
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the Net without control from an early age, can face
such
problems as talking to strangers,
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,
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content.
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psychologists
psycologists
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psychologists
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giving internet access to
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children.
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destructive influence
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young
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community. Statistics demonstrate, that teenagers
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to compare their life with others,
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psychology sessions.
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result of
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is different disorders
such
as depression, borderline personality disorder and anxiety.
On the other hand
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media
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great tool not only for keeping up with family and friends but
also
an opportunity to expand the network.
For instance
, LinkedIn is a social
media
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, like-minded people or do important career courses.
Secondly
, the internet is the fastest way to find all the needed data. People can hardly imagine themselves opening a dictionary or a cooking book to find necessary information. To conclude, the usage of social
media
is a
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must-have
for all age groups.
However
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serious problem about security on social
media
platforms, despite
this
fact the benefits of it still outweigh the drawbacks.
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