Many animals are facing extinction in the wild. Why is this happening? What can be done to protect them?

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are one of the important assets to the country.

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,Nowadays,The number of wild species count are drastically reducing especially Snakes,The Tiger,etc .

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could be due to the medical values of the wild

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as well as some

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thinks,The

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are endangering their environment.The government has taken many preventative measures to protect them along with educating

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about their imagination. The major reason for decreasing is due to hunting down the

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for medical value purposes.There are many

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that were killed by human beings to get their skins,

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as Horns,Etc.These are gain good values in the black market to do research for Cancer,Tuberculosis,and,so on,

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,Some

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believe a Black cobra skull contains green pearl which will earn millions in the market.

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,Peoples who stay near the forest surrounding are afraid of

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so to protect their families,they put fencing around the home which is connected with High-Voltage electricity.When crossing the fence

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were killed due to the supply of electricity.

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people

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such

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activities for them to earn money and some

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do it for their own safety precautions.But they need to understand without them we would not survive for a longer span of time.By considering

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,The government has taken many preventive precautions to protect them from

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incidents.

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,The

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who kill the

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for their own benefits will be executed and the government re-validating existing

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wild life

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protection

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this

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prove that execution had

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to protect against their attack.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

249 words

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Many animals are facing extinction in the wild. Why is this happening? What can be done to protect them?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many believe that learning a language at an early age is better while others think such language should be taught later. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what do you agree or disagree?

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?