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Nowadays many people complain about getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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Sleep disorder has always been an overwhelming issue in
this
 contemporary era. Whereas
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negatives
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 footprints of it must be recognised, by taking some steps it may
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diminish
. I will elaborate on its
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influences
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influences
 and remedies in
this
 essay. Sleep disturbance has dire consequences for our bodies. Sleep is essential for physical well-being. It is estimated that the average men and women need between
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 and eight
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sleep
 a night. The main purposes of sleep are to
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enable
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enable
 the body to rest and replenish. Lack of sleep,
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however
, can compromise the
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immune
 system.
As a result
, we are vulnerable to viral infection.
Moreover
, Insomnia leads to anxiety and irritability. Some are suffering from depression due to sleeplessness. In
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, If you don't get enough sleep, muddled thinking is not allowed you to concentrate on your duties and work. To cope with
this
 hardship, there are some measures.
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Researchers
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 show that
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 lifestyle can increase and improve the quality of our deep sleep.
For instance
, having healthy food
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, Taking a hot shower before bed and regular exercise
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assists
assist
 you to fall asleep quickly.
Moreover
, avoiding consuming certain foods and beverages may assist us to fall asleep more quickly.
For example
, drinking coffee or tea which contains caffeine has disruptive effects on sleep. High-fat foods and alcohol lead to poor quality sleep and shorter sleep duration. Plus, it is important to make the bedroom suited for falling asleep.
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 temperature should be comfortable. External noise can cause frequent awakenings.
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