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Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #climate #change #impact #business #opportunities
People
has
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have
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 different views about whether
climate
change
 has a positive or negative influence on
business
. While the extreme weather may promote certain industries, the overall trading industry will be affected negatively. Due to the extreme cold and hot weather in recent years, the whole cloth industry can be benefited from it. People need to buy clothes they may not need before against heavy snow weather or hotter summer.
Similarly
, factories which produce cooling or heating
products
 can
also
 make a lot more profits from
climate
change
.
Additionally
, new industries like electric cars and other eco-friendly
products
 appear because more and more people realize the serious consequence of
climate
change
.
However
,
climate
change
 will still cause problems for businesses.
Firstly
, the sea level has risen continually due to the melting ice caused by
climate
change
. In the near future, many
countries
 will lose their harbours which are one of the most important places for global trading.
Secondly
, many
countries
, especially developing
countries
, have to control their carbon emission under the regulation made by national meetings like
G7
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the G7
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 summit. The
carbon-control
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carbon control
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 will destroy most of these
countries
' economy because their main economic support usually
produce
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produces
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 more carbon, and the
products
 from these industries export those
products
 to the whole world. In conclusion,
although
 some benefits exist to some kinds of
business
 due to
climate
change
, the whole
business
, especially international
business
 will have fewer opportunities.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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