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The growth of the online shopping one day closure to shopping stores in cities. Do you agree or disagree with this.

#growth #closure #stores #cities
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According to some
people
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, all markets in rural and urban areas would be closed in foreseen future because of the growth of online shopping. I oppose
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 ideation and I think some of the physical
shops
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 would continue to exist along with online marketing for a long time.
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 with, there will be few
shops
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 which will be needed for physical shopping because some products are required physical checking before making the payment.
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 would help the shopper to ensure the quality of the item and select an appropriate one.
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, the daily purchasing of groceries from the convenience store,
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 as fruits and vegetables.
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,
people
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 will continue favouring actual
shops
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 where they can go and pick their requirements by themselves.
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, the easiness of scamming
people
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 online has made some individuals uncomfortable with the aforementioned method ,especially from a low trustworthy website. The Internet is an easy way for hackers to track
people
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 and steal money from their accounts.
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, research in Oman in 2016 concluded that the scamming frequency per person was directly proportional to the number of purchases done with the same bank card.
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, the only way to avoid
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 inconvenience is by lowering online shopping and adopting regular shopping
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 the enhancement of the security has been done to mitigate online scamming. To conclude, while some
people
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 think that online shopping would lead eventually to the total closure of
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 in towns and cities, I think that there will be remaining enough
shops
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 for physical purchasing along with online shopping.
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