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With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

#world #money #space #exploration #waste
In the
last
 couple of years, you can see an increase in the budget that governments spent on
space
exploration
. A recent survey suggested that
this
 is on average, an 5% increase over the
last
 decade. Is
this
 a good thing or a bad thing, because in many countries there are still a lot of other problems.
For example
, America spends the most money on
space
exploration
 in the world. While it
stills
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 has a lot of other problems.
Such
 as no free health care or a lot of violence in certain places.
In addition
, the state of many roads and bridges
are
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 really bad, I understand why people say that there needs to be more attention paid to
this
.
However
, in my point of
view
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 the money
spend
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 on
space
exploration
 is important.
First
 of all, due to
the
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space
exploration
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 there are many inventions  made, which help us get our life standards up.
Such
 as
an
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satetelite
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satellite
 that was launched
last
 year, which is located above Africa,
it
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has all
kind
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 of sensors to measure certain elements which are really important for farming. Another argument is that
because of
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certain projects in
space
exploration
are
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 built to find out how we came into existence. Personally, I feel that really interesting and important. To conclude, I personally feel that
space
exploration
 will get more important in the future,
such
as
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 industries
as
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space
 mining. It is important to not fall behind countries
such
 as China and
this
another
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 reason why it is so important
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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