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Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Mention some problems from this and suggest some solutions that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.

Nowadays, the alarming rate of
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 jams in metropolises has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
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 issue can exert detrimental effects
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 as economic depression and
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, some feasible solutions can be implemented to address it. There are a plethora of problems arising from
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 congestion. In
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there is a long tailback on the road during rush hour, which is the primary reason for coming late to work.
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 status not only hurts the individuals’ benefits but
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 reduces the productivity work of the business, which will cause an economic turndown.
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, due to heavy
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,
drivers
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 have to experience a high volume of pollution emissions.
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 might be explained by the solid fact vehicles release
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higher levels of carbon dioxide, resulting in many
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such
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 as respiratory
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, and cardiovascular
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.
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,
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 situation can be remedied, provided that some feasible steps are taken.
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, in order to improve the
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 flow, a bilateral control system is advisable to introduce, which will successfully assist the
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 in maintaining equal spaces with radars.
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, if self-driving cars are encouraged, it will mitigate the car accidents caused by
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.
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, the volume of
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 in the metropolitan will reduce.
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, according to
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 recent survey, 40% of car accidents can be to blame
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’ poor driving decisions.
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, removing careless
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 and promoting artificially intelligent vehicles are the essential element contributing to
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 reduction. In conclusion, increasing
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 jams in urban areas is a pressing issue that everyone has faced. Despite
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the car sequencing problem, and the disease caused by
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 congestion, some promising solutions involving bilateral control
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, and self-driving cars have been suggested to diminish terrible
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.

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