Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Nowadays, there are many kinds of advertisements on television.
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social media
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with friends and
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obvious opinions of mine on both viewpoints. In my opinion,
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can encourage people to buy things easily when we
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like I just tell you above that
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up on all types of
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social media applications after you searched for them.
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, a few minutes later, you
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open Facebook apps and see
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on the feed immediately.
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, It will show up for several days which
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us buy it even at the time you exactly do not need it. And I personally think that people will buy an unnecessary thing without reason especially with women while having a period, mood swing,
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I often shop online when I got insomnia in the middle of the night and can not sleep but I did not want it at all, just buy it that's all. On the other viewpoint, I think It is true but I disagree that new products can improve our lives. Some kinds of advertising are too much and surreal.
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, the quality of product materials
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unwealthy as a price. In conclusion, I
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viewpoint that other people said that advertising encourages us easier buy stuff,
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It is unimportant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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