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Children's educaton is expensive. In some countries the government pays some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Education
 has been increasing in importance.
Education
 might be expensive in certain countries. I believe it. Every single person needs to be educated.but some of them can't  All benefit from
education
.If the
government
 spent
money
 on their
education
, it would benefit.
such
 as saving
money
 and encouraging the
children
.
Firstly
,
people
 must save
money
 for their future if the
government
 gives sufficient scholarships. It affects
people
's lives.
People
 can easily reach every
school
, even if they are poor. It improves the
education
 system.
This
 improvement increases the percentage of
people
 who have got a certificate.My father hadn't finished
school
 if they were expensive. 
Secondly
, the
government
 should pay some of the cost. It is necessary because it improves
people
's morals.
People
 can afford it if the
government
 does not foot the bill.
In addition
, it's necessary for the improvement of the country.
People
 can be educated and even attend
school
 without free
education
.
Children
 are the future of
this
 country. They represent their country. Their
education
 is essential. My nephew is 10 years old. His family hasn't got enough
money
, but the
government
 pays her
school
 costs so she can go to
school
 and get an
education
.
Thirdly
,
this
 is an advantage due to encouraging
children
 to be educated and increasing concertation.
Furthermore
, they like their jobs so much. They have been closely connected to the
school
.Their curiosity is increasing because of free
education
.
For example
,
children
 have no fee
problem
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 because their
school
 is free. They focus on their
education
 and job improvement.
consequently
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education
 expenses  might be  expensive.
goverment
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government
  must do something  to   preserve   that.it has to be
ensure
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ensured
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  every single  can  afford to go to
school
  without paying 
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a fee
the fee
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fee
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fees
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. in my
opinion
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this
 is
big
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 advantage for every single 
children
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child
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. it will affect  positively  their  life.
for
example
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  recently every
sıngle
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single
 person
need
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needs
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  to be
literated
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literate
liberated
. if 
school
 fee is
inaffordable
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unaffordable
in affordable
affordable
   
children
cant
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can't
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  attend 
school
 and it 
afffect
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affect
  negatively  their lifestyle.
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