some people believe that travelling alone really benefits in learning countrie's culture and experience while others believe it is better to travelling with someone you know.Discuss both views and share your opinion.

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world travelling has become
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activity among
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young
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as it provides
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of opportunities.
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, some
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believe that
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travelling benefits
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learning and experiencing and some others oppose it. I agree with both views and in
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discuss
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solo
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travelling and
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about travelling with a partner.
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with,
people
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travel
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to learn and experience about
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countries
country's
countrie's
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country's
culture. When the travellers commute
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, it will give them the freedom to experience as there is no one to restrict,
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, the
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who
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alone can go anywhere and
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experience
exxperience
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experience
the culture without any limits.
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.they are able to build up their confidence as they have to survive by themselves. To elaborate on
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matter
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, when an introvert traveled to a country alone they have to
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communicate
with strangers in order to survive.
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, it will boost
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their confidence.
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, travelling with someone you know has several benefits
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as the security and limitation of expenditure.
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, especially when a girl is travelling alone it will be
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difficult
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difficult
for her to
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at night and
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to visit certain locations as she has to be concerned about her safety.But, if she
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with some she knows it will be easy for her to be safe.
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, when travelling together they can participate in fun activities and would not feel lonely.
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, visiting countries with another person will help to save money as they can share accommodation, food and other expenses. In conclusion,
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together and alone has both advantages and
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disadvantages
disadvanatages
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disadvantages
and I believe that they both are important depending on the place the person is travelling
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Even though, travelling
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helps to widen the knowledge it
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has some risks like getting in danger. So the person commuting should
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wisely whether to
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alone or with someone.
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