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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign langauge is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Learning a foreign
language
 has become an essential part of education for many
reasons
 which may include travelling or seeking a
job
 overseas. Some would argue that these are the main
reasons
 for learning a foreign
language
 whereas others believe that are other
reasons
 that are equally important. I personally believe that learning a foreign
language
 has other numerous
reasons
 and benefits that I will explain throughout and present the other view as well.
First
, many
people
 believe that learning a foreign
language
 is just required for travelling or finding a
job
 abroad.
This
 opinion sounds valid as it will be difficult to communicate in a foreign country without learning its
language
. There are many countries in which
its
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 citizens just speak
its
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 mother tongue.
For example
, in Japan, China, and Germany, foreigners are obliged to speak the languages of these countries
otherwise
, there will barriers
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 communication.
Moreover
, in order to find a
job
 abroad nowadays,
people
 need to master at least one foreign
language
 or more.
For instance
, many English educators are required to take the IELTS test to be able to obtain a
job
 abroad. In the USA, the more languages one
acquire
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, the more money they will get. Employers prefer employees to speak more than one
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language
langauge
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language
, especially in many fields ,
such
 as tourism and hospitality.
Although
 these may sound
as
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 sufficient
reasons
 to acquire a foreign
language
, there can be other important
reasons
 as well. It is worth mentioning that learning a
language
 is interlinked to learning about its culture. When a person learns about a foreign culture,
this
 will lead them to have different perspectives in life. It will enable them to read foreign fiction and foreign newspapers.
Consequently
, they become
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people
 and
this
 will help them to become well-rounded characters.
Furthermore
, learning a foreign
language
 could help
people
 to communicate with others from all over the globe and they will make international friendships. They can even marry someone from a different culture.
Thus
, they can lead a life full of excitement which is different from others. In summary,
people
 can have different purposes for learning a foreign
language
. I believe that all of these
reasons
 are equally important and
it
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 can bring many benefits to its learners.
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