more and more people are buying ready to eat foods instead of cooking themselves. does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Nowadays, We have been seeing that people are becoming busier than ever before in developed countries.
Consequently
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many of them may not have enough time in which they can make
food
. So they prefer to grab something to eat from the nearby restaurants. In
this
essay
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I'm going to discuss if
this
habit has advantages or disadvantages based on my opinion.
Firstly
, Buying ready
food
from the restaurant will disrupt your financial stability.
For example
, If you buy
food
every single day, It is crystal clear that you would see yourself in a financial problem because what you are earning cannot match
with
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what you are spending. You should be a rich person or financially independent who runs
his
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own company if you don't want to cook.
Secondly
, Attaching yourself with
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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food
has some impact on health. People who eat
food
from
the
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restaurant regularly may face obesity which is
a
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main cause of health complications.
However
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you may not have an idea how ready they are cooked.
This
is
also
problematic for some elderly citizens who have a health pre-condition. In conclusion,
Although
eating ready
food
helps several busy
folk
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around the globe, the development of staying away from
this
food
has more advantages than
disantage
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disadvantage
in which we can save a lot of money and keep ourselves in a healthy condition.
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