Some businesses now say that no-one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree with this?

There is no shortage of opinion on whether people should be allowed to smoke
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or not in their offices, or even in all public
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. But if I were forced to choose, I would definitely
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with businesses and
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that. It is my firm belief that smoking is bad for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs. To start with, I want to notice that
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giving some people the ability to smoke everywhere, others, who are non-smokers, are really affected and even become passive smokers. When someone who is near to you, decides to end a cigarette,
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breath and
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inhale
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all of
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and acids. And
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specifically a reason, why
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should smoke even in offices. Drawing from the experience of a close friend of mine, being a passive smoker can really cause a lot of
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. My friend Mick has been working in the company, where almost everyone spent at least an hour per day to take a rest from work for
this
negative habit, and after two years of working there, Mick had started feeling dizzy more often than usual. After having once a headache for a long time, he decided to visit a doctor and he was told, that impact on his health due to passive smoking was so huge, that he was required to
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a week in the hospital for the
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treatment. It is certainly clear to see why
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could be.
Secondly
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bad smell of cigarettes or hookah in public
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could be really disgusting. In the country where I live, there are no restrictions
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all of these things, and sometimes those smokers can even
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your romantic evening. I remember when once I went on the date to
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luxury restaurant with one pretty girl, and as
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of cigarettes was so
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, we decided to leave the restaurant early, even though there was a beautiful sunset that day. Both of us were against smoking in
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and found that
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extremely
extermely
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disgusting. So I believe, that changing laws in
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of disallowing smoking in public
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, can really prevent these awkward situations. To summarize, I want to emphasize, that I totally agree with the statement that some business and
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governments
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governments
restricts smoking in public
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, and I strongly believe, that all of the reasons I mentioned above, could be really helpful for a quicker restriction of
this
negative habit on the country level.
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  • public health
  • second-hand smoke
  • respiratory diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • productivity
  • fire hazards
  • environmental advantages
  • aesthetics
  • non-smokers
  • personal freedom
  • well-being
  • smoking bans
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