Some people think city planners create more green spaces and plant tress. Others believe that they should focus on building new houses. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

On the one hand, it
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that creating more green spaces and growing trees in cities means higher quality.
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, plants in
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freshen up the ecosystem by absorbing carbon dioxide and other toxic chemicals as well as by reducing noise pollution.
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, having plenty of green space improves the quality of life in the metropolitan areas
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providing an opportunity to be close to nature for the residents.
On the other hand
, some people think that constructing more habitats is more crucial rather than organizing natural resources when it
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to designing towns and I agree.
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to say, the housing issue is ubiquitous in urban places due to the
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of
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population, which makes erecting residential
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buildings
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should
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city
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planner
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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